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She Writes in Grayscale

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When she was in high school, she wrote with colors.

She wrote with the shades of a heart, and the shades of the sky. She wrote with the subtle differences in each color of green on each blade of grass. She wrote with the color of light flowing out of her fingers and the colors of orange in fall tumbling out of her mouth and dancing across the paper like leaves dancing across the sky.

She wrote with the pinks and purples of sunset and every color of dawn. She wrote with the tones of earth that you could scoop up in your hands and let drip through your fingers. She wrote with the pastel colors of twilight and the bright hues of a coral reef on the coast of some foreign country she would never get the chance to see.

She wrote with a prism hanging above her paper so she could see the colors of the world, and she wrote with rainbows seeping out of her pores and collecting themselves on paper to form letters, words, and sentences.

But now,  she writes in monotone.

She writes in black and white and a grayscale so limited you can't tell the difference between a comma and an apostrophe, and letters in words fade together and fade away until all you can see is the white of the paper behind them.

She writes like a still, somber statue, with pen in hand, but to slow and too weathered to move it. Her once bright words are like smoke from a cigar against a white backdrop in a black room, barely visible and barely there for a instant.

Because smoke fades away, and ink will always dry out, and inspiration left her like the way snow leaves a cloud - beautiful, but cold.
Feedback request!! :dance: Does the one line about coral reefs and the ending fit in okay? I wasn't sure if i should keep it or not :P and does it seem too much like everything else out there about this subject? I tried to put my own twist on it, but it was sorta a fail :blush:
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Sadistic-but-Sweet's avatar
-Is finally getting around to reading some writing and poetry lately after an insanely busy month-

Your mastery of imagery always astounds me. You're able to paint such vivid pictures with only a few words. Gorgeous. I love the contrast between the beginning and the end. The ending was beautiful - it gave me chills. There was something so melancholy about it, so sad, and I could relate to that feeling of dried up inspiration. I love how you related losing one's inspiration to the way snow leaves a cloud - "beautiful, but cold." Not a lot of people would think of it that way, but it works. The girl in the story used her inspiration to create these beautiful works of literature, but as time passes, eventually the inspiration dries up and leaves her cold, uninspired.

There is one tiny detail that popped out to me, and although it's not necessary to appreciate what the story's about, it's something to consider - In the beginning you mention the girl was a freshmen, and then it just jumped into "But now, she writes in monotone." How far ahead is "now"? A year? A decade? Was this beautiful bit of inspiration fleeting? Or was it something that was worn away with time? Actually, I'm not even sure the "When she was a freshman in high school" is needed - just "She used to write with colors" - or it may just need to be rewritten to be less specific. I dunno, it just seems wordy and throws off the transition from the first part to the second for me. Could be my own problem, though.

Either way, it's lovely. You know I admire your work. Keep at it, and Happy New Years. :heart: